Kann mir bitte jemand meinen englisch text korrigieren?

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Hallo zusammen, ich muss in Englisch eine Characterization schreiben, von Lennie in dem Buch: About Mice and Men aber ich bin nicht gerade gut in Englisch und wäre sehr dankbar wenn ihn jemand korrigieren könnte.

Steinbeck begins the novella with an idyllic scene, for it creates a background for the idealized friendship between the men and introduces the romanticized dream of farm life that George and Lennie share. The relationship between George and Lennie is establishes in the first pages in a dialogue in a speech of uneducated laborers. Lennie is one of the principal characters in Of Mice and Men, but he isn’t most lively. He experiences no considerable changes. George and Lennie are migrant worker but Lennie is more childlike, because of his heavily walk and the way a bear drags his paws. The reader gets the impression both character are not particularly dynamic characters. The behavior of Lennie is relatively static because of his kind innocence, the deathless devotion he shows George. His wonts of petting soft things like small animals are his principal traits from the beginning to the end of the book. Lennie is dependent on the welfare and protection of George. In the course of the first chapter the reader is sympathize with people who society often deemed unworthy because of their class, physical or mental capabilities, or of the skin color. George constantly tells about the farm they plan to own. Their farm represents a playe in which George and Lennie can live together just as they are. There will be no dangers and they will live without apologies. They no longer will be subject backbreaking will of others. The dead mouse in Lennie’s pocket stands for the symbol of the end that awaits poor, clueless creatures. In spite of Lennie’s big physical size and strength, his childlike mental capabilities make him as helpless as this dead mouse. From chapter 2 is Lennie and George's arrival at the ranch and an unpleasant encounter with Curley. Occurring art as Curley over Lennie shows opposites in emotion and action with the gentle Lennie, which seems to be not self-conscious. Lennie is strength of Curley, as the weaker, dominated and defeated. George and Lennie instantly feel the danger that Curley’s presence represent. To avoid getting into trouble with Curley, they promise to keep even closer to each other than general. Lennie’s friendship to George is rare and formidable. George and Lennie make pull up in front of their farm without women, as they make life just that. States as well as in the novella is that women represent one temptation that not pursue perfection.

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Dein Englisch ist tatsächlich etwas wacklig. Ich hab ein paar Sachen rot markiert. Das Unterstrichene ist entweder falsch, oder es erschließt sich nicht der Sinn den du mitteilen willst.
Deine Beschreibung von Lenny ist zudem nicht einheitlich. Du musst klarmachen das Lenny geistig zurückgeblieben ist und in George nicht nur einen Freund sieht sondern das George seine einzige Bezugsperosn ist die er um jeden Preis verteidigen würde und auf den er hört, bedingungslos, zu sehen zB in der Szene in der Lenny von Curley angegriffen wird und er sich erst verteidigt wenn es ihm George sagt.
Die Ausgangssitution ist nicht wirklich idylisch da das Leben von Wanderarbeitern während der Großen Depression sehr hart war. Und für die beiden noch sehr viel härter da Lenny aufgrund seines Faibels für weiche Sachen und seiner immensen Körperkraft immer wieder in Probleme bringt.
Lenny selbst entwickelt sich durch die Geschichte wirklich nciht, aber das ist auch nicht weiter interessant und aussergewöhnlich, da er geistig zurückgeblieben ist und vollständig von George abhängig ist.

Steinbeck begins the novella with an idyllic scene, for it creates a background for the idealized friendship between the men and introduces the romanticized dream of farm life that George and Lennie share. The relationship between George and Lennie is established in the first pages in a dialogue in a speech of uneducated laborers. Lennie is one of the principal characters in Of Mice and Men, but he isn’t most lively. He experiences no considerable changes. George and Lennie are migrant workers but Lennie is more childlike, because of his heavily walk and the way a bear drags his paws. The reader gets the impression both characters are not particularly dynamic characters. The behavior of Lennie is relatively static because of his kind innocence, the deathless devotion he shows George. His wonts of petting soft things like small animals are his principal traits from the beginning to the end of the book. Lennie is dependent on the welfare and protection of George. In the course of the first chapter the reader is sympathize with people who society often deemed unworthy because of their class, physical or mental capabilities, or of the skin color. George constantly tells about the farm they plan to own. Their farm represents a playe in which George and Lennie can live together just as they are. There will be no dangers and they will live without apologies. They no longer will be subject (von was) backbreaking will of others. The dead mouse in Lennie’s pocket stands for the symbol of the end that awaits poor, clueless creatures. In spite of Lennie’s big physical size and strength, his childlike mental capabilities make him as helpless as this dead mouse. From chapter 2 is Lennie and George's arrival at the ranch and an unpleasant encounter with Curley. Occurring art as Curley over Lennie shows opposites in emotion and action with the gentle Lennie, which seems to be not self-conscious. Lennie is strongerthan Curley, as the weaker, dominated and defeated. George and Lennie instantly feel the danger that Curley’s presence represent. To avoid getting into trouble with Curley, they promise to keep even closer to each other than general. Lennie’s friendship to George is rare and formidable. George and Lennie make pull up in front of their farm without women, as they make life just that. States as well as in the novella is that women represent one temptation that not pursue perfection.

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