hier meine inhaltsangabe von "slam" aus dem green line 6. habt ihr vllt ein paar verbesserungsvorschläge für mich?:) danke schonmal im vorraus:*
The shortstory „Slam“ by Nick Hornby is about teenage pregnancy and shows us a 16-year-old boy who is scared of becoming a father.
The action takes place at the time of the narrator’s 16th birthday. His name is Sam. In the morning he gets some cards, presents and doughnuts which his mum bought him before and he already plans his birthday-afternoon and –evening. After the breakfast Sam gets a message from Alicia. She writes that she has to see him very urgent. Sam answers her, locked in the bathroom and gets a nervous feeling. Some time ago he and Alicia petted and he didn’t prevent. Now he’s scared that her urgent message could be that she’s pregnant. He has already that strange feeling in his guts.
He texts her back that he has no time, but she answers that he has to come. So they arrange a meeting at the Starbucks at 11 am. Sam gets very nervous and wants to sit on his mother’s lap, like a child. And he also wishes he would still be one and not to have such problems. He is also scared, that his mother wouldn’t love him anymore if she knew that he gets father. While going to the coffee shop he tries to deal with god. He wants Alicia not to be pregnant and promises God that he neither will ever skate, nor go to McDonald’s, nor to watch TV anymore. He also thinks that he won’t ever have sex, after this experience. At the Starbucks he buys a drink, trying to lengthen the time he doesn’t know the result yet. Suddenly he sits next to Alicia with his Frappuccino. She wishes him a happy birthday and tells him that her period is late.
btw: dass die inhaltsangabe keinen schluss hat ist absicht:)
: Im 1. Satz könntest du schreiben "The short story 'Slam' written by Nick Hornby. The action takes place at the time of the narrator's 16th birthday who's called Sam. -> Damit du nicht dieses "his name is Sam" hast. Du könntest zusätzlich noch erwähnen, wer Alicia ist, also "message from his girlfriend Alicia" weil der Leser die Geschichte ja eventuell nicht kennt. Den Satz "He has already that strange feeling in his guts." kannst du eigentlich weglassen, der ist überflüssig, weil eine Summary ja kurz und knapp sein soll und das ist ja die bereits erwähnte Angst vor der Schwangerschaft. Ansonsten ist das doch schon ganz in Ordnung 